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TruXta said:
Want some critique Meth? Let go of the rhyming. Sometimes it forces you to make bad choices.
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i dont care truxta
have you not listened are you not there?
the only pity on here is from people that cant rhyme
one damn line
christ knows if they ever get to a full verse
i aint seen any yet though, and no im not hurt

i think you might be forgetting
whilst your all up and sweating
that i choke you up, yea i gone fuckin bust you up
coz most of you happen to suck

i make bad choices coz im a bad mutha fuck
if you think im stopping ya shit outta luck

and one more time loud as you can... I DONT GIVE A FUCK! lol
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(eminem)
its friday
and its my day
imma party
all the way till sunday
maybe monday
i dunno what day
everydays just a holiday!

lol

seriously though weekend has landed so you got 3 days off.

i suggest you make the most of 'em

peace to the peaceull.. rest of y'all know what to do (eat my poo)
 
Honest, Meth, and this is nothing to do with your antics regarding Sojourner - rhyming isn't a defining feature of either poetry or rap. You might think it is, but it really isn't.
 
TruXta said:
Honest, Meth, and this is nothing to do with your antics regarding Sojourner - rhyming isn't a defining feature of either poetry or rap. You might think it is, but it really isn't.
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i think it is with rap most deffo. poetry? no, poetry is easy. rap is hard.

but whatever makes you happy.

im likely be in dreamland for the next 3 days anyway

peace!
 
Meth,I'm not trying to be horrible, but your rap verses aren't really up to scratch. The rhymes are poor, the lyrics don't always scan properly, you don't seem to be able tell a story, the put-downs are lame, and there's no interesting use of metaphor or any of the features you would usually associate with good hip-hop. Carry on if you like doing it, but it's not something you are good at.

The fact that nobody else is putting anything else on here just means they've got the sense not to do so when they know they haven't got any talent.
 
Rap is hard? You're joking right? Most of the shit that comes out these days is hard? Guns, bitches and bling is hard to write about? Stop it, you're fucking killing me.
 
TruXta said:
Rap is hard? You're joking right? Most of the shit that comes out these days is hard? Guns, bitches and bling is hard to write about? Stop it, you're fucking killing me.
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Bad rap is easy. Brilliant rap is very difficult. You can write badly about guns, bitches and bling (50 Cent) or brilliantly about it (GZA).
 
Favelado said:
Bad rap is easy. Brilliant rap is very difficult. You can write badly about guns, bitches and bling (50 Cent) or brilliantly about it (GZA).
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Brilliant anything is very difficult. Rapping well is a separate skill from writing well, doing both well is something very few contemporary rap stars do. Eminem is not one of them. GZA is.
 
Favelado said:
Meth,I'm not trying to be horrible, but your rap verses aren't really up to scratch. The rhymes are poor, the lyrics don't always scan properly, you don't seem to be able tell a story, the put-downs are lame, and there's no interesting use of metaphor or any of the features you would usually associate with good hip-hop. Carry on if you like doing it, but it's not something you are good at.

The fact that nobody else is putting anything else on here just means they've got the sense not to do so when they know they haven't got any talent.
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whatever you want

i dont care

fuck off allready
 
TruXta said:
Brilliant anything is very difficult. Rapping well is a separate skill from writing well, doing both well is something very few contemporary rap stars do. Eminem is not one of them. GZA is.
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eminem has mastared EVERY aspect of rap..he is the best in the world. he is an angry bastard yea i'll give you that but he is a fuckin genius.
 
Carry on if you enjoy it. It doesn't do me or anyone else any harm. I'm not just out to try and piss you off.
 
TruXta said:
Rap is hard? You're joking right? Most of the shit that comes out these days is hard? Guns, bitches and bling is hard to write about? Stop it, you're fucking killing me.
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ide like to see you jump up on stage and win a battle..its REALLY fuckin hard.

yea all the bling bling bang bang does my head in abit tbh, but Mr.Mathers is fuckin genius.
 
why im i even still here.. i have opium, methadone, loads of downers, loads of weed..

maybe i come back monday.

and no, i dont give a fuck what any of you think
 
METH LAB said:
why im i even still here.. i have opium, methadone, loads of downers, loads of weed..

maybe i come back monday.

and no, i dont give a fuck what any of you think
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And yet you can't drag yourself away from the keyboard. Why are you here indeed. Have a breather. It'll only do you good.
 
METH LAB said:
ide like to see you jump up on stage and win a battle..its REALLY fuckin hard.

yea all the bling bling bang bang does my head in abit tbh, but Mr.Mathers is fuckin genius.
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Performing is hard, writing not so much. As for Eminem, I'll agree to disagree.
 
Citizen66 said:
Heh. I've had a thread full of people calling me a sex pest because I started a thread they didn't like. It wasn't even about sex either. :D they just dragged up some ancient instance that apparently happened that they conveniently refused to furnish me with the details of and I was as guilty as charged. At least the people in the world who actually know me don't say such shit.

But whatever. Still waiting for the police to knock on my door though.
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no we just wear all over latex suits to prevent pregnancy and have wipe down furniture :D
 
METH LAB said:
poetry is easy. rap is hard.
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What do you think someone who read your raps would walk away with? In terms of their changed understanding of the world, the insights and unexpected images you offer them, etc?

Those are some of the things that've got me liking a few poems on here. fwiw.

(Not many of which have rhymed :D)
 
TruXta said:
Brilliant anything is very difficult. Rapping well is a separate skill from writing well, doing both well is something very few contemporary rap stars do. Eminem is not one of them. GZA is.
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I don't think you or the rap hal of fame or many within the hiphop community would agree with you.

GZA was the first to get a deal from wu but tbh most of wu's records are very same samey and GZA's lines are limited kinda like Eddie Izzards comedy, it's nicely done but hasn't really progressed anywhere from where it started RZA has on the other hand and certainly from the point of view of being a master is a better citation. Even he's quite limited in his flow style however.

and least we forget the awful Forever double album...

Eminem is also a very good writer, free-styler, producer, manager, lable owner and is the GZA of Dirty Dozen (D12) in effect the new and in many ways similar as fuck to the WU's ascendancy it's like saying new kids are better than back street... ignoring they are in essence the same type of group...

Favelado said:
Bad rap is easy. Brilliant rap is very difficult. You can write badly about guns, bitches and bling (50 Cent) or brilliantly about it (GZA).
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depends what you mean by brilliant rap really... lyrically brilliant, technically brilliant, innovatively brilliant....

I love hearing non heads talking about hiphop...
 
Eminems undeniably good at what he does but people that mention Eminem normally only do so cos they've not heard enough underground. Saying this though he's def respected by top rappers eg Rakim. Shame on the flip side he's a whiny gimmicky rapper.
 
mrs quoad said:
What do you think someone who read your raps would walk away with? In terms of their changed understanding of the world, the insights and unexpected images you offer them, etc?

Those are some of the things that've got me liking a few poems on here. fwiw.

(Not many of which have rhymed :D)
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what makes you think that rap has to change anything...

or poetry for that matter.

I thought about luton as a swallowed my crouton isn't necessarily the most insightful poem for the reader is it... yet it's poetry...

equally
My girlfriends in the olympics,
she'll be running track meets,
I'm lying, she's a paraplegic,
she eats wit her feet,
the fuck' you laughin at?,
She'll be here next week,
In a black jeep,
wit 2 other handicap freaks

isn't the best rap lines either...

(john hegly and Bizzare d12 fyiw)


they don't have to impart or become some great social oracle they can just be about rhyming and being silly, poking fun or being in essence rythmeical, rhyming comedy, with set ups and punch lines.

Look for example at Niki Minaj her lyrics are nonsense utter nonsense

I am not Jasmine, I am Aladdin
So far ahead, these bums is laggin'
See me in that new thing, bums is gaggin'
I'm startin' to feel like a dungeon dragon

as are the beastie boys

It's not a put down, I put my foot down
And then I make some love, I put my root down
I'm like sweetie pie by the stone alliance
Everybody know I'm known for dropping science


both who tend to use rhythms/rhymes within the line rather than triplets or couplets or alliteration

romans revenge quoted above btw proves what the difference between a good rapper (minaj) and a great rapper (eminem) can be... listen to it if you don't believe me....

would you say these aren't successful and proper rappers or poets??
 
Ax^ said:
White people arguing about rap



So much win..

:)
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I'll bite, So black people shouldn't play or listen to or talk about, Classical music,Country,Folk etc etc actually if cultures don't borrow evolve then whites shouldn't ride horses, eat potatoes......... I dunno fill in whatever. The whole whites can't talk about hip hops been done and died on hip hop forums years ago(well nearly) I maybe a Wigger but most the black people I know, know fuck all bout Huey p, Malcolm Or martin, histories universal and most don't give a fuck bout history anyway. So are the on going rights struggles(universal) In fact there is and has been alot of racism from the black community about whites in rap,which the insular nature of is partly understandable due to racism in America and self preservation/protection it imbues, but that doesn't mean their right or you should get away with such stupidity.
 
Favelado said:
Obviously I meant one of or all of those things you complete mong.
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you'd best start conversing in a far more clear manner in future then rather than this inconsiquential abstract bollocks then...

see here on urban largely we like to disucss the topic in depth and with detail you can guage the tone from the posts around it and the manner in which others are posting... it doesn't look like this is a cocking about thread so maybe you'd better up your fucking posting game or shut up and do as the FAQ advise and read a little before jumping in with your glibe bollocks comments eh son...
 
GarfieldLeChat said:
you'd best start conversing in a far more clear manner in future then rather than this inconsiquential abstract bollocks then...

see here on urban largely we like to disucss the topic in depth and with detail you can guage the tone from the posts around it and the manner in which others are posting... it doesn't look like this is a cocking about thread so maybe you'd better up your fucking posting game or shut up and do as the FAQ advise and read a little before jumping in with your glibe bollocks comments eh son...
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I've been having a look round for a few weeks. Urban seems like a great site in general. Broadly left-wing, Brixton-centric with some excellent music threads and a weighty back catalogue of stuff to flick through on a slow afternoon. In general it's literate too.

I'm happy to engage with that. Hopefully, this can be a little home for me on the internet.

You are clearly a different kettle of fish. You can't string a sentence together. This maybe due to some kind of condition such as dyslexia or whatever. However, you're clearly thick on top of that. You should be glad you have some kind of condition because you at least have an occasional mask for your low IQ. You think you're engaged in "in depth" debate, but you seem only capable of knee-jerk emotive responses and missing the point of what others say. You also seem widely despised.

I hope that's specific enough for you. I wouldn't want to be "glibe".

We won't be arguing further in the future. This will cover everything.
 
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