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frogwoman said:
No he doesn't, I intended his accent to be less strong but I don't think i made it consistent throughout the book, that's something I will have to look at in my edits. Thank you for picking it up.
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How comes he has a less strong accent when she's the one who went to university? That's what didn't make sense to me.
It sort of comes over like he's the posh one.
 
stereoisomer said:
How comes he has a less strong accent when she's the one who went to university? That's what didn't make sense to me.
It sort of comes over like he's the posh one.
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I should maybe make it more clear but he's done a lot of anarchist writing and done talks and stuff. Also, the reason she has kept her accent is partly a rebellion against those posh twats at university!

:D you're right though!
 
stereoisomer said:
Yes perhaps you should add a bit explaining that!
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Also, he was interviewed in the magazine, so he's fairly involved in all that stuff. But yeah maybe I should explicitly point out he's done talks and that sort of thing :D this is actually the sort of stuff it's really useful to know :cool: I hope it doesn't make it completely implausible!
 
frogwoman said:
Also, he was interviewed in the magazine, so he's fairly involved in all that stuff. But yeah maybe I should explicitly point out he's done talks and that sort of thing :D this is actually the sort of stuff it's really useful to know :cool: I hope it doesn't make it completely implausible!
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No it doesn't, but I'm not sure why doing talks would change his accent so much while Lou's been to uni and her accent hasn't changed at all?
 
stereoisomer said:
No it doesn't, but I'm not sure why doing talks would change his accent so much while Lou's been to uni and her accent hasn't changed at all?
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Lou also deliberately kept her accent like that, as a reaction to the people she met in uni. Also, she was living at home while going to uni whereas Mark has moved up and down a bit. I should maybe add a sentence or two to this effect in the first chapter :D

thanks for pointing this out I feel quite silly :D
 
frogwoman said:
Lou also deliberately kept her accent like that, as a reaction to the people she met in uni. Also, she was living at home while going to uni whereas Mark has moved up and down a bit. I should maybe add a sentence or two to this effect in the first chapter :D

thanks for pointing this out I feel quite silly :D
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I've got a bit of time, reading part 30 now...

I think this would make an awesome film. Talisha is so badass.
 
frogwoman said:
socking it to those fucking cunts. I loved writing that chapter. :D
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I'm writing Jessica III at the moment, in which Jessica and Betty team up to take revenge on Seth, it's going to be awesome. Not sure how violent I'm going to make it. I'm thinking, quite violent. Jessica has changed but she's also still the same person, if you know what I mean? She's still got that 'fuck you' attitude.
 
stereoisomer said:
I'm writing Jessica III at the moment, in which Jessica and Betty team up to take revenge on Seth, it's going to be awesome. Not sure how violent I'm going to make it. I'm thinking, quite violent. Jessica has changed but she's also still the same person, if you know what I mean? She's still got that 'fuck you' attitude.
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:cool:
 
frogwoman said:
See my reply.

I don't agree with the sexual stuff no and I can forsee Betty awakening an evil side of herself.
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That's an interesting idea! I'll have to write one from Betty's point of view I think.

btw I love how you're talking about my characters as if they're real people!

RE your comment- it's not my intention to write it that Norbogaine ever wears off. It's an imaginary drug that I've invented so I guess I can give it whatever properties I want! :p
 
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stereoisomer said:
I can see Betty and Jessica becoming more like Talisha....
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Talisha is not really evil. She's quite screwed up in many ways but I don't think she is that evil. She was wrongly thought to be evil but she is slightly attracted to violence (is with the bull fighting thing) and is very blunt and only cares about a select few people, but a lot of the reasons for this is because of her upbringing and because other people never really have her a chance.

Yeah your characters are very convincing. I really like them.
 
frogwoman said:
Talisha is not really evil. She's quite screwed up in many ways but I don't think she is that evil. She was wrongly thought to be evil but she is slightly attracted to violence (is with the bull fighting thing) and is very blunt and only cares about a select few people, but a lot of the reasons for this is because of her upbringing and because other people never really have her a chance.

Yeah your characters are very convincing. I really like them.
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I thought you were writing Talisha as a sort of semi-sociopath, she doesn't give a shit that much about right and wrong but when something is really wrong she will do something about it. And also being very fine with violence.
 
stereoisomer said:
I thought you were writing Talisha as a sort of semi-sociopath, she doesn't give a shit that much about right and wrong but when something is really wrong she will do something about it. And also being very fine with violence.
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Yeah. Pretty much. She is. But a lot of it is because of extreme shit that happened to her. The shit people did to her.
 
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stereoisomer said:
new installment in the Jessica/Betty storyline
http://wp.me/p4WYXj-2D
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I can't see a link to the first part of your story - put it up and I'll take a look. You too, Froggy.

Hour of Writes is a new writing competition that seems to be pretty well organised. You do have to pay to enter, but I think it's something like £3 for three entries, and the first prize is £100. I found it worth entering just to get some really ego-boosting and useful feedback on my work. :)

Also, here's a creepy poem I wrote (not for this competition, but at the same time as it). Anyone like it? It's intended to be read aloud, really.

***
I am the darkness that waits at the door
For when you unwittingly place in my claw
The key of a tear or a sigh or a shout
With which I can enter, and shut the light out
And then I can creep up behind you unseen
And put my arms lovingly round you
And squeeze

Once you are still I climb up to my place
Anchor myself on your neck and your face
When I am hungry my teeth pierce your spine
And I feed till you're weak and you're hopelessly mine
I laugh and you shiver but you'll never know
That now I'm the darkness that rides on your back

And will never let go
 
Yeah, I like iambic pentameter.

I've jut written a story for this week's challenge. You only get an hour for the actual writing part (I was thinking it up in bed last night) so it's going to need some serious editing to make it actually good, but it's OK. Post-apocalyptic depressive stuff, naturally.
 
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